Give me feedback you cowards!

I wrote this in 60 minutes so there must be something you can remark upon.

Halt!

This is an attention robbery! You’ll read my poetry till finality or, it’ll cost you your dignity! Now give me every dime of y’r time!

Don’t be bored, no need to fear, I’m not like the real robbers here. They, don’t respect their spoils like me! I actually savor your time you see.

No, I have a spine so I rob with rhyme. They would trap you in their web Stab you with subscriptions And ad-insult to y’r injury.

Now hand over that feedback wallet, and be on your way, wanderer Steer clear of the algorithm wood. Those robbers are up to no good.

  • Goodman@discuss.tchncs.deOP
    2·
    3 days ago

    Now that I have you here. What do you think of the third stanza? I think it’s the weakest, but I also like it the most.

    • Akagigahara@lemmy.world
      2·
      3 days ago

      I am not very good at critiquing, don’t really know what to pay attention to. Especially for poetry. It’s fine to me, I don’t think it is weak. Has some fun word play.