- cross-posted to:
- poetry@lemmy.world
- cross-posted to:
- poetry@lemmy.world
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That end tho
“Small trees sway, waves break on inland waters” kind of hits.
Yeah, honestly, this is kind of a banger.
I really appreciate the OP of this (nontanne) for making me see the poetry in something I was familiar with, but had never considered in this way before. I think it actually works really well as a poem, and I feel like I’m going to remember this each time it’s extremely windy
It also works backwards
Make it a palindrome for full circularity
Read this to my wife, telling her it’sa poem. She likes the wordplay, and the metaphors. It made her feel uncertain, uneasy.
Wait let me try the same
edit she said it’s beautiful, she could feel the wind. We’re not native speakers, so not sure she understood every line. But still
Same!
This was oddly good.
Also an accurate description of the 2 hours immediately following my consuming taco bell.
You need more vegetables in your diet.
This sounds so much like Overseer’s - Heligoland: https://youtube.com/watch?v=4NmrluR4VkY
This leaves rustled jimmies of violent destruction in my already difficult to use mind.
